ok, some ideas Im unsure about, and some other stuff. Also, took an idea of Joeys and washed David over it.
Very unsure about the middle section still...
10 - 11 - 12, in a previous post 10 and 11 were combined.
13-14, here the protagonist is escaping the pipes, and then landing in an extremely boring, not-very-dynamic way. This would need touching.
new page 2-3 (we are probbly going to have page 1 start on a right page now, meaning numbers will be bumped up one...) and 13 now a two page 13-14 spread. hmm.